医药论文英文摘要中的常见错误与评改

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  　 1、 原文：Determination of Gallic Acid in Zhixueting Liquids by TLCScanningZHOU Qun1 XU La-ying2 (1. Department of PharmacologyTongji Medical College Huazhong University of Science and Technology Wuhan 430030 China; 2.The Faculty of Pharmacy HubeiCollege of Traditional Chinese Medicine Wuhan 430061China)ABSTRACT Objective: To determine the content of gallic acid in Zhixueting liquids. Methods:Zhixueting liquids were dissolved by distilled water and thenextracted into the sample with butanal etc. The samples were determinated by TLC scanning (λS=280nmλR=350nm). Result: The average recovery rate was 96.36% and RSD=2.39%. The contents of gallic acid in 3 five batches of samples were 0.380.42 and 0.47mg/ml. Conclusion: The method is simple convenient and available.KEY WORDS TLC Scanning; Zhixueting liquids; Determination; Gallic acid修正：Determination of Gallic Acid in Chuxueting1 oral Liquids by TLC ScanningZHOU Qun1 XU La-ying2 (1. School of Pharmacy2 Tongji Medical College Huazhong University of Science and Technology Wuhan 430030 China; 2.The Faculty of Pharmacy Hubei College of Traditional Chinese Medicine Wuhan 430061China)Abstract Objective: To determine the content of gallic acid in Chuxueting oral Liquids. Methods: The Chuxueting oral Liquid was dissolved in distilled water and then extracted （into the sample删去） with water-saturaled n-butanol3 etc. for the preparation of samples. The samples were subjected to gallic acid determination by TLC scanning (λS=280nmλR=350nm). Results: The average rate of recovery was 96.36%（and删去） RSD=2.39%. The contents of gallic acid in 3 （five删去） batches of samples were 0.380.42 and 0.47mg/ml respectively. Conclusion: The method is simple convenient and feasible.KEY WORDS TLC Scanning; Chuxueting oral Liquids; Determination; Gallic acid

    点评：
    1. zhixueting 应为“止血停”而非“出血停”，自相矛盾。“出血停”也可译为hemorrhage-stopping，以方便国外读者理解。

    2. school可作“（大学里的）院”解，原意是“药学院”，而非“药理教研室”，故改之。

    3. 斜体n表示“正”。

    2、原文：Content Determination of Emodin in Qingre MingmuCapsulesLUO Ming-zhu1 ZHANG Hong2 (1.Hubei Provice Institute ofDrug Control Wuhan 430030 China; 2.The 75310 Medical Team of theArmy)ABSTRACT Objectives: To determination content of modin in QingreMingmu Capsules. Methods: Tlcs was used silica gel Tlcplatedeveloping solvent was Benzene-Ethyl fermate-formic acidMethanol-water(3:1:0.05:0.1:0.5) of which the upper solutionλS=435nmλR=530nm. Result: The linear relationship of sampleapplication which ranged between 0.168-3.09μg was good. The regression equation was below: Y=105417.7X-1115.6r=0.9995; arerage recovery was 100.53% RSD=3.38%. Conclusion: This method is simple accurate and convenient.KEY WORDS TLcs; Qingre ming mu Ccapsules; Emodin修正：Determination of Emodin Content in Qingremingmu1 CapsulesLUO Ming-zhu1 ZHANG Hong2 (1.HubeiProvicial Institute of Drug Control Wuhan 430030 China; 2.The 75310 Medical Team of the Army)ABSTRACT Objective: Toset up a method for the determination （content删去） of Emodin content in Qingre Mingmu Capsules. Methods: In the TLCassay a 0.5% canboxymethyl cellulose sodium (was used删去) silica gel G plate and a developing solvent with a mixture of benzene—ethyl formate—formic acid—methanol—water(3:1:0.05:0.1:0.5) as the upper solution were used.λS=435nmλR=530nm. Results: Agood linear relationship was found when the sample amount (which删去) ranged between 0.168-3.09μg （was good删去）. Theregression equation was as follows: Y=105417.7X-1115.6 r=0.9995.The average rate of recovery was 100.53% RSD=3.38%. onclusion: The method is simple convenient and accurate.KEY WORDS TLC; Qingre Mingmu Ccapsules; Emodin

　　点评：1、中成药名用斜体书写，也可译作removing pathogenic heat to improve acuity of vision。

　　3、原文：Research on The Acute Toxicity of Huning CapsuleXIN Zhi-wei ZANG Zhi-he MAI Xiao-xia FENG Jun YANG Wan-qing LIAO Hong-li (Teaching and Research Section of Pharmacy The Third Medical University Chengdu College of PLA 610081 China)STRACTObjective: To observe and test the acute toxicity of Huning Capsule on Kunming mice after an i.g. Methods: Count the eath cases of mice in 7 days after the i.g. and work out the LD50 of Huning Capsule. Results: The LD50 of Huning Capsule on ice is 3981mg/kg.KEY WORDS Huning Capsule; Acute Toxicity; LD50修正：An Experimental Study of the Acute Toxicity of HuningCapsules1XIN Zhi-wei ZANG Zhi-he MAI Xiao-xia FENG Jun YANG Wan-qing LIAO Hong-li (Teaching and Research Section ofPharmacy Chengdu Military Medical College The Third Military Medical University Chengdu 610081 China)ABSTRACT Objective: To observe and determine the acute toxicity of Huning capsules (on Kunming mice删去) after a single intragastric administrationin the mouse. Methods: 50 Kunming mice were randomly divided into 5 equal groups with 10 animals in each group. A single dose of 7500 5630 4200 3150 and 2360mg/kg-1 of the content of the capsules were administened through a gastric tube to each of the mice of the 5 groups respectively. The numbers of the deaths of the mice within 7 days were noted down and the mediar lether dose (LD50) of Huning Capsules was calculated. (Count the death cases of mice in 7 days after the i.g. and work out the LD50 of Huning Capsule. 删去) Results: The LD50 of Huning Capsule in mice was 3981mg/kg. Conclusion: Huning Capsules have only a minor acute toxicity. It is therefore safe to use the drug clinically. Further study of its toxicity in long-term application is required.KEY WORDS Huning Capsules; Toxicity acute; LD50

    点评：
    1. “呼宁胶囊”也可译作antitussive and antiasthmatic capsules.